For the flashback section where they open the journal, the panels seem stagnant and I want to experiment with making that section more interesting particularly because the text is quite dense.
I wish to have the art communicate with the text more effectively to reflect the context clearer.
I plan to continue to introduce narrative elements in the backgrounds to help build the world and the society the characters live in.
I still need to hash out the navigation of some pages especially the double page spreads.
I am also going to consider foreshadowing Mara's abilities earlier in the story so that they don't feel too random at the end. Or it could possibly be a reveal of some sort.
Another possible addition I was thinking about was time stamps to emphasize the concurrent stories.
An element of the latest layout is the transitioning from page turns like when at the end of one page where Mara is leaving a room at the end of one page and on the next its Cypress walking down a hallway, as well as on another page where Mara is sitting in her room at the end of one page and on the next Cypress is sitting in her room.
the transitions synthesis the narratives but I can also foresee some complications for who the reader is focusing on. However, this may just be because of the lack of detail which I think will make a significant difference.
For the next few days I plan to work on some character and environment designs while we get software sorted.
I think the narrative is at a good point and the only thing left to sort out are a few paneling issues on some pages.
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